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This piece is poetic, bitter, and tragic. Not to mention blunt and effective. You've made a fan of me.

Sad and contemplative though not altogether shocking or provocative. Dialogue gets the point across but I never really felt like I knew these characters. Only their type. Good place to ...

some pretty images. mostly infuriating.

This didn't interest me too much until I connected the title to the poem.

This is awesome.

Paperback novels Lining walls Like sluts in a whorehouse These three lines are, well, gold. This is crude, abstract, CLEVER, and also rather charming - just how I like it.

The "lullabye" was intentional, was it not? If I understood the poem correctly, it fits quite well.

Just out of curiousity, what was the meaning behind this title? I liked how it felt.

Thanks.

I like the wordplay.

I like this. A refreshing change of perspective.

The divisions represent the mental progression of someone dealing with a breakup.

Read it over and insert missing words/correct spelling mistakes. Once you do that, you have an awesome poem in your hands. Darkly funny and deeply sad at the same time. ...

She replaced it with this. I'm a he. 8)

I think this would be much stronger broken up into a poem than a story. It has a lot of very good poetic elements. And if it were part of ...